Wednesday, October 23, 2013

Social Change Project- Argument of Proposal



     A significant number of people, predominantly female adolescents and young adults, are becoming intimidated by skinny, anorexic, and unnaturally fit models featured in magazines and advertisement. Because it is causing underlying mental and physical harm to young women, and because it is encouraging models to become "skinny enough" to fit into modeling agencies’ standards, to the point where it is extremely harmful, magazines, advertisement companies, and modeling agencies, should being using "normal sized” models, to promote a healthy body, healthy lifestyle, and a healthy mentality towards your appearance.

     Most young women see these extremely skinny, fit models and they (the young women), are naturally intimidated and their self-esteem usually drops down. Who doesn't want to fit in with these body type standards? It is human to feel the need to be better than your present self, to want to look like what people are saying is “beautiful” and “healthy”. As stated on "Eating Disorders and the Role of the Media," a survey was conducted with 11-17 year old girls who were given three magic wishes, and it concluded that their number one wish was to “lose weight and keep it off.” In another survey, most women said that what they most wanted to change about themselves was their weight. “This pervasive body dissatisfaction and preoccupation with weight has become part of the female experience in North America” (Eating Disorders”, Spettigue). 
     Although it is underlying, and no one may notice it, this is causing harm to young women. The media plays a major role in developing some of the most well-known eating disorders, which are the predominant effect of these anorexic models being all over the media. Studies looking at the role of media in eating disorders revealed that over the time, the average weight is decreasing among models, actresses, and beauty pageant contestants who are “held up as ideals of beauty”( “Eating Disorders”, Spettigue ). What is ironic, that appears in the same study, is that over the same period, the weight of American women is increasing. This increases the discrepancy of the actual body size, and the ideal body size in America. Because young women are trying so hard to come into this “ideal,” most of the time, they begin developing eating disorders like bulimia and anorexia.
     Not only is this anorexic-like “ideal” body type doing damage to young women, it is also affecting models. As time passes, according to "Eating Disorders and the Role of the Media," the weight is constantly decreasing among these models and etc. that are considered “ideals” of beauty. This is another important issue to look at, because these models are competing to be the skinniest, to have the extreme ideal skinny body. Models are obsessing more and more about their bodies, trying everything and anything to become the skinniest. Not only does this add to the plenitude of eating disorder cases, it also becomes a bad example for young women. Models are displayed on social media, in America’s Top Model, in example, as always obsessing over their weight. And the media does not censor out when these models show evidence of eating disorders. Obvious or not, it does encourage young women to do the same so that they become just like these models. In an article on Medical News Today, a study on increasing cases of eating disorders among models estimated that about 20% to 40% of fashion models are currently experiencing an eating disorder. 

     For the sake of the young women of America, magazines and media should begin using normal sized models, who promote healthy body types instead of the present “too skinny” ideal promoted by most models. This problem is causing underlying mental and physical harm to young women. it is also encouraging models to become "skinny enough" to fit into modeling agencies’ standards, to the point where it is extremely harmful.

Works Cited:


Spettigue, Wendy, and Kathrine A. Henderson. "Eating Disorders and the Role of the Media."NCBI. U.S. National Library of Medicine, n.d. Web. 22 Oct. 2013.Nordqvist, Christian. "Eating Disorders Among Fashion Models Rising." Medical News Today. MediLexicon International, 8 July 2007. Web. 23 Oct. 2013.

2 comments:

  1. Hey Brisa, I thought that the structure of the blog in general was very good. I easily spotted your claim. You had reasons to back up that claim. I was able to detect the warrants in there. You also included facts, which are the statistics, and logic. I also loved your ending paragraph because it really shows the call to action you want from your audience. I don't know if I said that right lol. Basically I'm saying you tell your audience what you want them to do very clearly. Now for the constructive criticism. Your third and fourth paragraph's, I felt were very redundant. It was like you were saying the same thing over and over again. Oh and I can't stress this enough with you, please watch out for your grammatical errors. For example: "should being using" is not proper; "being" should just be "be". That's in the first paragraph. I spotted some more but I'll let you find those. Just be careful of those things and stop typing so fast cause I have a feeling that is what's happening.

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  2. Great start, Brisa! Your last sentence in the first paragraph is awkwardly put and would be stronger if clarified and broken up into a few sentences. You could benefit from adding a transition to the quote in your second paragraph. I can see how your third and fourth paragraphs are different points, but if you want them to each be strong individual points I would recommend going back and focusing on them and elaborating. They get a little muddled and redundant as Briana pointed out.
    I'm a little disappointed you didn't go with your ex-magazine reader angle! Although I see where you are going in the last paragraph, I feel you could add more powerful, persuasive phrases that really push the reader to action. Also, is this aimed at people who you want to help change how the industry portrays people, or is it aimed at the magazines directly?

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